楼主文章写得真不错呀,我虽然不会写演讲稿之类的,但还是受过修改训练(应试),不知是不是打字时粗心,只犯了一些很小的错误
1.most of the students
2.seek help with(建议用to) their problems,楼主是根据“help sb with sth ”而来的吧,不过这里介词应和谓语动词一致,毕竟seek有专门的介词搭配
*seeking (for) solutions to current problems
寻找对目前问题的解决办法
3.our social skills will also improve
4.the risk of getting involved in unhealthy
5.cover us from the risk of getting involve in unhealthy activities ,“降低卷入不良活动的风险”?
risk一般用得比较严肃risk常常是冒着实质性的、较大的(经常是关于投资或者牵涉身体上损伤)的险,“违章行驶”还说的过去,但是我可不觉得逛商场是什么坏事呀。
例如 risk defeat/death risk being seen/caught/arrested etc。
楼主这样,其实没什么特别的错,建议就用普通说法:keep us away from unhealthy activities ,“使我们远离不良行为”
Miyazakehime 最后编辑于 2011-07-18 21:19:36
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